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I think you keep secrets under your skin
like trees keep rings and do not know it,
like the sea teems,
like dark and quiet space
keeps every ray of light
the stars whispered to one another
when they were still young
and dying to make love.

I think you keep secrets in you
like the desert keeps sands,
like sleep keeps dreams,
like cities keep sleepless people
and people looking for sleepless people
to fall asleep with.

I think you keep secrets
like secrets like to be kept,
and I want to learn them all.
This poem and many more can be found on my website, [link].

Edit: Thank you all for the Daily Deviation! :D
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2015  Student General Artist
This is absolutely enchanting.
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:icontheslugpoet:
theslugpoet Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2014
The first line really grabbed my attention and kept me reading. Very nice. I enjoyed reading this piece.
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: dailylitdeviations.deviantart.… Congratulations on your DD!

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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beautyinreview Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This piece is so lovely. I love the repetition of the sibilant sound, especially in the second two stanzas. The whole second stanza, in fact, is beyond wonderful. An excellent poem that is well-deserving a DD. :)
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:iconsilverinkblot:
SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know I've featured this piece in my 2012 showcase of literature: [link] :D
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:icongabrielgadfly:
GabrielGadfly Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you!
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:iconsesam-is-open:
sesam-is-open Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012
Superb poem and very well deserved DD.:rose:
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:icongabrielgadfly:
GabrielGadfly Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you.
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:iconsesam-is-open:
sesam-is-open Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
My pleasure:)
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:iconragnaice:
ragnaice Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. This is beautiful. On a second reading I just have to stop after almost every line to ponder the beauty of the simply worded language "like dark and quiet space/keeps every ray of light," "like cities keep sleepless people/and people looking for sleepless people/to fall asleep with." So lovely. :clap:
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:icongabrielgadfly:
GabrielGadfly Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Professional Writer
I'm glad you liked it.
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:iconeebbob:
eebboB Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012
like it......want to send it to some one. may i have your permission?
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:icongabrielgadfly:
GabrielGadfly Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Certainly.
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:iconsigma-echo-seven:
Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Student Writer
Worth it. :)
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful in its simplicity and truth. The most gentle of ways to ask for such a thing. :heart:
Congrats on the DD. :D
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:icongabrielgadfly:
GabrielGadfly Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you!
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:iconbeyondjen:
BeyondJen Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!
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:iconjesuisunebonbon:
JeSuisUneBonBon Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is just too powerful and beautiful. <3<3
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:iconashellessmind:
ashellessmind Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
Do you feel like every image in this poem is powerful or that every image in a poem should be powerful?
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:iconfallingangel22:
FallingAngel22 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I cannot believe how beautiful this poem is...
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:iconmannu1410:
mannu1410 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
nice one
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:iconrockerjase:
rockerjase Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
"like cities keep sleepless people
and people looking for sleepless people
to fall asleep with."
That is some spectacular wordplay, well done
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:iconstonedecker:
Stonedecker Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
Very insightful, keep up the great work
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:iconorchid-black:
Orchid-Black Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
Beautiful imagery, beautiful words.

:blackrose: :skullbones: :blackrose:
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:icondaeranilen:
Daeranilen Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You had me at "like trees keep rings and do not know it,". Beautiful use of simile, sir. :iconclapplz:
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GabrielGadfly Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you!
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:iconskyriaa:
Skyriaa Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a really beautiful piece of work :heart:
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:iconzoidledoidle:
zoidledoidle Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That's absolutely lovely. For some reason it makes me really sad.
Awesome work. Congrats on the DD!
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happyhorseshoe303 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
there... are no words for this. the english language does not contain a word to grasp this level of beauty...
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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GabrielGadfly Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks!
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WateryGrave Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Student General Artist
How very cute and lovely to read on a Saturday night. c: I could see a story unfolding in my mind's eye.
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Geak-of-Nature Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I love the flow and expanse of this, the imagery, the message. I turn my music off to listen to myself read it. So moving!
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WontDieACopy71 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very sweet and honest. I like this very much :) Nice work.
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:iconinthestarrynightsky:
InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
A beautiful, lovely piece. Wonderful job.
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:iconetheral-fox:
Etheral-Fox Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Beautiful. :iconcryforeverplz:
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:iconalemangaanimelover:
alemangaanimelover Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Student Filmographer
so beautiful! :")
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AxelThePhoenix Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
My goodness! This is an amazing poem, and I absolutely love this!
This poem could be useful in my own life!
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:iconmerrilu:
MerriLu Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
That. was. so. BEAUTIFUL!!!!
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:iconherakushi:
herakushi Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Student General Artist
This is just too beautiful.

-and I do hope that who ever you could have said this to, or written this to, will get the hint. :I
--- unless this was a piece for us. :>
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JustACosplayer Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so deep...
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Thanks for writing this!
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely.
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OtterMoonSong Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Professional General Artist
Made me smile that smile you give yourself as a gift when you hear something honest.
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puccagirlfan121 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
This poem is deep :'(
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:iconkallios:
Kallios Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
sweet. Love the symbolism and imagery.
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:iconeuxiom:
Euxiom Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
Oh, this was really beautiful.
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sumgie1 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
Interesting. :)
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ZenScout Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"like dark and quiet space
keeps every ray of light
the stars whispered to one another
when they were still young
and dying to make love."

How To Flow with Impact !

Beautifully weaved, Im grateful to read.
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Professional Writer
Congratulations on the DD! It is very well earned. The format of this is so gripping and enveloping....
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012
"like cities keep sleepless people
and people looking for sleepless people
to fall asleep with."

perfect.
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